OKAY, I'm soooo glad you like it. Really, really glad. And also that I had a freaky psychic moment and wrote everything you wanted :D
The Bess conversation was one of the more fun pieces of dialogue I've ever written. I was, like: how can I make Jenny's despair seem as hilarious as possible? and then: BESS HAS TO MOCK HER.
This goes to show that I need someone to beta read when I'm excited about something. Normally, before I post anything, I angst and hate it and freak out about it for a few days after I've finished writing it, but I finished this one and pretty much posted as is. Which explains all the random typos. You can just leave them in a comment, if you want, and I'll fix everything at once afterwards. That would be awesome.
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD. The sofa thing! You have to consider that I write my scenes out of order, especially in this style, so originally I had a CRAZY VAGUE LESBIAN SEX SCENE on Jenny's sofa, instead of just a kiss, so I kind of forgot to edit that part out when I edited out the sex scene. That's a huge *facepalm* moment if there ever was one :D :D :D
(I'm seeing Coraline in 3D this weekend! It will be epic!)
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OKAY, I'm soooo glad you like it. Really, really glad. And also that I had a freaky psychic moment and wrote everything you wanted :D
The Bess conversation was one of the more fun pieces of dialogue I've ever written. I was, like: how can I make Jenny's despair seem as hilarious as possible? and then: BESS HAS TO MOCK HER.
This goes to show that I need someone to beta read when I'm excited about something. Normally, before I post anything, I angst and hate it and freak out about it for a few days after I've finished writing it, but I finished this one and pretty much posted as is. Which explains all the random typos. You can just leave them in a comment, if you want, and I'll fix everything at once afterwards. That would be awesome.
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD. The sofa thing! You have to consider that I write my scenes out of order, especially in this style, so originally I had a CRAZY VAGUE LESBIAN SEX SCENE on Jenny's sofa, instead of just a kiss, so I kind of forgot to edit that part out when I edited out the sex scene. That's a huge *facepalm* moment if there ever was one :D :D :D
(I'm seeing Coraline in 3D this weekend! It will be epic!)