Firstly, it's really scary how much of the stuff you put in there was stuff I was thinking about. Like collaborations, and drinking, and Jenny swearing way too much and Regina always smiling, and writing songs for each other, and answering machines, and BESS ROGERS; it was like you were reading my mind, seriously. Regina was adorable in all the ways she always is, and Jenny was pathetically in love and characterization was beautiful, somehow, even though I've gotten perhaps an hour's worth of either of them actually talking.
I really like your vignette form of writing that you've been doing lately. It encompasses the whole of the relationship in short, sweet moments and I enjoyed it immensely
The conversation between Bess and Jenny was my favorite conversation ever. I have been treasuring it alllll week. :D
There were a couple sentences with typos, minor ones that are easy to miss (my favorite is "We would just end up tacos"). Should I post them as a comment or just PM you or something, because it would be kind of a lame comment.
Also: ...Jenny replies, forlornly, throwing herself backwards onto her sofa, remembering what happened on her sofa and rolling onto the floor. What happened on the sofa?
In conclusion: My love knows no bounds for you or this fic. (Also, the kissing! And the ending! gah!)
I've snared five people into watching Coraline so far. Make sure you see it in 3-D!
OKAY, I'm soooo glad you like it. Really, really glad. And also that I had a freaky psychic moment and wrote everything you wanted :D
The Bess conversation was one of the more fun pieces of dialogue I've ever written. I was, like: how can I make Jenny's despair seem as hilarious as possible? and then: BESS HAS TO MOCK HER.
This goes to show that I need someone to beta read when I'm excited about something. Normally, before I post anything, I angst and hate it and freak out about it for a few days after I've finished writing it, but I finished this one and pretty much posted as is. Which explains all the random typos. You can just leave them in a comment, if you want, and I'll fix everything at once afterwards. That would be awesome.
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD. The sofa thing! You have to consider that I write my scenes out of order, especially in this style, so originally I had a CRAZY VAGUE LESBIAN SEX SCENE on Jenny's sofa, instead of just a kiss, so I kind of forgot to edit that part out when I edited out the sex scene. That's a huge *facepalm* moment if there ever was one :D :D :D
(I'm seeing Coraline in 3D this weekend! It will be epic!)
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in which I gush in run-on sentences and overuse commas. And try to leave vaguely constructive critic
Firstly, it's really scary how much of the stuff you put in there was stuff I was thinking about. Like collaborations, and drinking, and Jenny swearing way too much and Regina always smiling, and writing songs for each other, and answering machines, and BESS ROGERS; it was like you were reading my mind, seriously. Regina was adorable in all the ways she always is, and Jenny was pathetically in love and characterization was beautiful, somehow, even though I've gotten perhaps an hour's worth of either of them actually talking.
I really like your vignette form of writing that you've been doing lately. It encompasses the whole of the relationship in short, sweet moments and I enjoyed it immensely
The conversation between Bess and Jenny was my favorite conversation ever. I have been treasuring it alllll week. :D
There were a couple sentences with typos, minor ones that are easy to miss (my favorite is "We would just end up tacos"). Should I post them as a comment or just PM you or something, because it would be kind of a lame comment.
Also: ...Jenny replies, forlornly, throwing herself backwards onto her sofa, remembering what happened on her sofa and rolling onto the floor. What happened on the sofa?
In conclusion: My love knows no bounds for you or this fic. (Also, the kissing! And the ending! gah!)
I've snared five people into watching Coraline so far. Make sure you see it in 3-D!
Re: in which I gush in run-on sentences and overuse commas. And try to leave vaguely constructive cr
OKAY, I'm soooo glad you like it. Really, really glad. And also that I had a freaky psychic moment and wrote everything you wanted :D
The Bess conversation was one of the more fun pieces of dialogue I've ever written. I was, like: how can I make Jenny's despair seem as hilarious as possible? and then: BESS HAS TO MOCK HER.
This goes to show that I need someone to beta read when I'm excited about something. Normally, before I post anything, I angst and hate it and freak out about it for a few days after I've finished writing it, but I finished this one and pretty much posted as is. Which explains all the random typos. You can just leave them in a comment, if you want, and I'll fix everything at once afterwards. That would be awesome.
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD. The sofa thing! You have to consider that I write my scenes out of order, especially in this style, so originally I had a CRAZY VAGUE LESBIAN SEX SCENE on Jenny's sofa, instead of just a kiss, so I kind of forgot to edit that part out when I edited out the sex scene. That's a huge *facepalm* moment if there ever was one :D :D :D
(I'm seeing Coraline in 3D this weekend! It will be epic!)